i really need help editing this passage for has part of my college application. can you please correct my use of commas, semi colons, colons, quotations and spelling? and also if it makes sense. what do you recommend me addend more of? i feel like its too short. bu don't know what else to put. help please. thank you in advance. question: Briefly describe your family's economic background. Include information about your financial challenges. response: My family has had economic struggles due to the fact that there have been many challenges and hardships for the whole family. My father has been a detail er at a body shop for over 10 years. As for my mother who quit being a Medical Assistance after 10 years due to the birth of my youngest brother, now 16. She is now a cafeteria worker for the Laos Angel es Unified School District. Because both parents have no degree and father dropping out of school in the 6th grade to help support his family financially it is extremely difficult to find a decent job with a steadily income. Mom who is now a citizen came to the united states from Costa Rica on a student visa. As well for dad who emigrated here from Costa Rica. Having a sister who is now in the second year of college educated me on how important it is to have a degree and live a decent lifestyle. Younger still 16 and a junior in high school. So now we are aiming for a better lifestyle and focusing on achieving the next level to success.
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My family has had many challenges and hardships. My father has been a detailer at a body shop for over 10 years. My mother quit her job as a Medical Assistant after 10 years when my brother was born 16 years ago. She is now a cafeteria worker for the Los Angeles Unified School District. Neither of my parents have a college degree and my father dropped out of school in the 6th grade to help support his family financially. It is extremely difficult to find a decent job with a steady income. Both of my parents emigrated to the United States from Costa Rica. My sister is in her second year of college and has taught me the importance of having a college degree. My younger is still in high school and relies on my parents financially. I am focusing on achieving the next level to success. I focused on improving the grammar and punctuation. Good luck!
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